I can never just do anything.

In putting Art After 5 back online, I reread it. Parts of it made me cringe, so I started to edit it.

It’s ridiculous, you know. I’ve put hours of editing work into the manuscript. Most of what bugs me most about fic version is long gone from that incarnation, but I still feel strange putting something up anywhere with my name on it that I’m anything less than proud to have written. So I’m fixing up something that after the next month or so will never again see the light of day, because I take my writing that seriously. ALL of my writing.

A couple of funny things I’ve noticed. No one runs in AA5, but there’s a lot of “I practically ran.” I guess that shows you how little I run in real life.

The most overused word is “so”.  The two most overused phrases are “He shook his head dismissively” and “I naïvely assumed”.

The name Heidi was used on two occasions for two different characters, and I misspelled McGillin’s through most of the story.

It is what it is, but the next one was better.

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  1. on 22 Aug 2010 at 12:27 pmElizabeth440

    You are way too hard on yourself! It was your first effort at writing, and despite any technical issues, it was a wonderful story. It still is! If anything, let that first version serve as a tribute to how you have developed as a writer and how seriously you take your craft.

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  2. on 22 Aug 2010 at 1:48 pmKailaB.

    Thank you for putting AA5 back up. I love the new layout very easy to use.

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    cicada reply:

    @KailaB.,
    I love it, too. :)

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  3. on 22 Aug 2010 at 6:25 pmpatty

    awww i get that you feel really protective of your work and constant edits are part of it, but don’t beat yourself up too much.

    i fell in love with this story the first time around and though the corrections will matter, i’m sure the essence is the same. ;)

    and i dont run around much either :D

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  4. on 23 Aug 2010 at 4:25 pmmad4hugh

    Interesting how time away from something gives us a different perspective, huh? Writing is not easy for me at all, it takes me time to “craft” a letter, etc. I hate going back and rereading something I wrote, to realize the wording was awkward or I forgot a word entirely in a sentence.

    I, for one, NEVER noticed an overuse of the word “so”…and I never really run in real life either. Heh, heh: in fact I had to run to catch up with someone the other day and felt like a total spaz…I felt so totally NOT graceful. Limbs flailing about unnecessarily. Not my finest moment AT ALL.

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  5. on 25 Aug 2010 at 4:12 amGems

    AAR is an incredible story, seriously almost perfect.

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    Colleen reply:

    thank you so much.

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  6. on 28 Aug 2010 at 4:33 amlost

    Think of how retarded the average person is, and realize half of them are stupider than that.

    Sent from my iPhone 4G

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  7. on 28 Aug 2010 at 3:28 pmKate

    I’m so happy to see AA5 back!!! I’m just catching with things fic related. Did I see you are going to write Kate’s story? I think reading that might break my heart, but I’d read it of course. I identified with Kate for lots of reasons beside the name

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  8. on 29 Aug 2010 at 7:39 amchansen

    Absolutely one of the best fics out there. Delighted yo have found it here. The layout? Flow was so great. I didn’t need to stop and go back and forth after each chapter. Maybe this is not the best for you as I could read faster and didn’t always comment when I might have, sometimes to tell you Bella was a sh#t or you made me cry. Please don’t sweat the little stuff.
    Question for you though. Will there be a different version of Darkrooms here, or same as FFN?

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